| = so... | Corina Gina Papouis [17.Nov.10 18:12] |
| The poem seemed long enough to lose the edge you intend it to have. I considered this: when it becomes deafening like a cliché you could insert various things into your ear a yellowish flat key turn and turn again until depending on what side of silence you live in a door opens or locks if it persists don't despair practically there's no limit to the things you could try stare at a blank wall long enough until one of you starts to bleed ...it sums up that feeling and does not dilute the message. (of course, one reader's opinion):) cheers! | |
| = of course | Constantin Delca [17.Nov.10 20:02] |
| I value my readers' opinions and they can cut through the fabric of my writings in whatever way they like and believe appropriate, I don't mind. However, in this case I would like to stick to the actual content, even if is somewhat long (maybe exactly because :)) Anyway, I appreciate the comment. Cheers! | |