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 =  pain
Dely Cristian Marian
[29.Jul.12 20:44]
i could only see your temples, the bracelets...
the sweet part is covered up with sensibility. too much pain.

i think the second verse may be shorter
"I lost almost all my dreams
buried in old rubble
like a deflated ball of an orphan child"
and the third verse looks better to me without the second line and that name.

lost feeling,

 =  Thanks
Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu
[30.Jul.12 11:07]
Thanks for your comment delmar and for your careful and insightful reading. I am happy you understood my poem, reading it under your own censorship. But I will not change its form. Hoping your feelings won't be lost in the future,

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