| = pain|
Dely Cristian Marian
|i could only see your temples, the bracelets...|
the sweet part is covered up with sensibility. too much pain.
i think the second verse may be shorter
"I lost almost all my dreams
buried in old rubble
like a deflated ball of an orphan child"
and the third verse looks better to me without the second line and that name.
| = Thanks|
|Thanks for your comment delmar and for your careful and insightful reading. I am happy you understood my poem, reading it under your own censorship. But I will not change its form. Hoping your feelings won't be lost in the future,|