| = lightness... | Romulus Campan Maramuresanu [11.Nov.12 10:42] |
| Hi Vavila, Please reconsider [in the road], for "on the road". Also it would be worth reconsidering from [I know your soul... -onto- love comes] as it unnecessarily weakens your text. This genre, given it's lighter "texture", is rather susceptible to cliché. I am not at all against feather-weight lightness when it comes to love, as love is so frail, therefore hard to pour in heavy words/ideas, but sometimes as it flows into writing, it's personal importance may hide the cliché. With respect, rcm | |