| = "morning until fall and falls..." | Edilberto González Trejos [29.Sep.05 01:52] |
| "november crimson from that missing night morning until fall and falls gold against yellow" Smart use of language, bright imagery, a remarkable poem indeed. Cheers, SONGO | |
| = different sameness(es) | Petre Calin [22.May.06 12:54] |
| maybe you should have named it "gold against yellow", as it calls forth the bright (sic!) sensation that every idea in the poem is paralled by, or matched with, its counterpart metaphor. in the end one loses control over the poem's various levels of understanding and prefers to knowingly mistake idea for metaphor each time idea comes across, and bumps into, metaphor. anyone attempting to tell them apart would immediately be "brightened" by the gold-against-yellow phenomenon. | |
| = beautiful | Dana Muºat [04.Nov.05 16:14] |
| Hello Alma! there are two nice things i liked in your poem: "the longest heaven"-it's a hyperbolic image, i liked it most. and "november crimson from that missing night"-beause i find "november crimson" a very good metaphora, the colour is getting into the live of november and she screams. The screams are so hard that they are rising to the "longest heaven" This is how i feel the poem. | |
| = Dana, Songo, Patrick - thank you | Alina Manole [10.Dec.05 13:34] |
| Thank you very much for your comments. You highlighted the ideas that I could be the most important for this poem, the colour of an imaginary world, the essence of gold versus yellow. | |