| = Well done, anyway, and an interesting topic! | Sydney Krivenko [12.Dec.07 13:58] |
| Well said, very true and uplifting. Some of the words, if I may say, do not suit the flow of this poem, like "contract". Just a question, since you put the text into stanzas of 4 lines, would it not be better if they rhymed more? It looks as if you tried to rhyme in the beginning and then gave up... | |
| = Answer to: Sydney Krivenko | Popa Viviana [16.Dec.07 00:12] |
| Sydney Krivenko, thank you for your comment :) I know, "contract" annoys me too, but...Uh, I just can't seem to think of anything better!Also, about rhyming...hee, hee, there's an interesting pattern...in the first stanza, lines 1 and 3 rhyme. In all the others, only 2 and 4 rhyme. I don't know how it turned out that way!! Thank you, again, very much! | |