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= exagg.
Akira Touriyama
[16.Apr.06 14:16]
blue + tear = so much and over, above the blue ocean plane, so much and over.
= Love. Peace. Sheika
Juan Felipe Parra
[23.Apr.06 01:54]
Shy. Very shy.
It's elements are correct to emphasize the feeling of mellowness, but you need to read, draw, dance to unblock it. I think it has a lot of potential.
If you don't use the elements you exaggerate to create or point at another reality, the poem remains plane. Keep it in mind.
Ummm... if you can read Nicolás Guillén, or Federico García Lorca, you can find structures and ways of making stronger the 'whole new world' points that you make.

Let loose that fist! Write, write, write!

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= exagg.	Akira Touriyama [16.Apr.06 14:16]
blue + tear = so much and over, above the blue ocean plane, so much and over.

= Love. Peace. Sheika	Juan Felipe Parra [23.Apr.06 01:54]
Shy. Very shy. It's elements are correct to emphasize the feeling of mellowness, but you need to read, draw, dance to unblock it. I think it has a lot of potential. If you don't use the elements you exaggerate to create or point at another reality, the poem remains plane. Keep it in mind. Ummm... if you can read Nicolás Guillén, or Federico García Lorca, you can find structures and ways of making stronger the 'whole new world' points that you make. Let loose that fist! Write, write, write!