| = nice but, would be better if... | Marius Surleac [03.Oct.08 23:07] |
| For the beginning I like the idea of this short poem, the imagery as well, but is not quite a haiku. A haiku doesn't mean only the rule of 5-7-5 and the nature elements. My only suggestion would be to change the title with the subtitle. I like it! Marius | |