| = . | dan marius [16.Jan.09 15:54] |
| definitely not workshop material. please reconsider. I'd like to see it on the main page. | |
| + agree | ion a [17.Jan.09 10:56] |
| i'm flabbergasted that a text like this could end up in the trash bin. sure, nobody is truly "professional" around here, but let's try to maintain a modicum of decency. you can seldom read such an acute, piercing emotion rendered in just a scattering of simple words. incredible how a simple word play on a couple of numerals becomes a profound elegy about the human condition congrats dora | |
| = the answers | Marius Surleac [17.Jan.09 15:52] |
| Ion and Dan. I was the one that put this text to the workshop because it hasn't the same quality like the previous Dora's texts. I am sure that this poem can be improved but that repetition of numerals in such a small poem doesn't help at all. Also, I would suggest you to think first before making different presumptions about the editorial stuff - you both know what I mean and I also know why you think like that, but here is something else, something different. P.S. If I had had subjective issues against Dora's poems, then all of her poems would have been classified as Workshop Only - nobody else from the editorial stuff approve her poems, but me. So, Ion, you don't have to give a star to prove something. Hope I was clear enough. Thank you! Best wishes, Marius | |
| = :-) | Iwouldntknow [17.Jan.09 19:35] |
| first of all: thank you ion, dan and marius. second of all (see? i'm keeping them coming- the numerals, yes) this text is just a little exercise- not pretentios at all; I didn't mean it as a "poem", but that was the only category available that I could relate it with. I appreciate the way dan and ion showed consideration for it- thank you again. I mentioned at some point that I needed guidance, as these are literally my first attempts (five out of five -.O). Marius, if "all members are encouraged to submit their comments and offer creative feedback" on the workshop texts, why wouldn't you do it in the first place? I'm not saying my text is "super-ultra-mega awesome", I'm not the judge of that here. I don't make presumptions about the editorial staff, I'm sure you have loads of experience compared to me in this matter. the text may very well be crap. but you who dismissed it are the first one who should come with that feedback mentioned above. creative even :)). I'd appreciate it very much if you did in the future, because I'm relying on you guys to show me right from left... or how was it? :)) as a conclusion: PLEASE stand up, criticise and acuse! that's why I'm posting. Please! | |
| = Marius | ion a [17.Jan.09 19:27] |
| sorry Marius, it was presumptuous on my part, but it did happen before... as for the star, i really think this is the best poem Dora posted here so far regards | |
| = ! | Marius Surleac [17.Jan.09 19:50] |
| Ion, I understand you perfectly well and you know why. Dora, probably you haven't noticed but I commented on the Workshop texts a lot and many of them went out from this area after that. It is true that I have also some periods when I can't comment because I am not an employee here and I have a job, I have a family and can't stay all day long on the page; but very often I come back on the Workshop area and give comments at least to the poems I have put here. So, that's why my feedback couldn't come so quickly. I also invite other authors to come with constructive criticism, because - at least this version - here is a virtual place where we can improve the quality of the texts: the whole meaning is that of workshop. Now, about the text - I find the repetition not so ok for the aesthetic of your poem but the imagery here is good. Also, there is "thieves" instead of "thiefs". Please fix that. Thank you for understanding, Marius | |
| = :D | Iwouldntknow [17.Jan.09 20:09] |
| Why, thank you. :D:D | |
| = Marius | dan marius [19.Jan.09 10:37] |
| "Also, I would suggest you to think first before making different presumptions". Dearest dude, I did think. That's why I decided to post a comment. You know, I agree it might be difficult to be the "aesthetic" judge of all texts submitted here and I sincerely appreciate the fact that you guys do it so well. I know it demands a lot of time & effort. This being said, what pissed me off here was that I didn't see an "explanatory" comment supporting your action. On my part, I thing this text is brilliant. You don't like it. Fine. You don't have to like it. But if you decide to label it work-shop material then please explain why. It comes with the job. Of being an editor. Or excuse me, an "aesthetic judge". | |
| = true | Marius Surleac [19.Jan.09 11:26] |
| Of course everyone understands something else. I don't have to bring other explanations than those from above. Thank you for your understanding Dan! | |
| - . | Marius Surleac [19.Jan.09 15:22] |
| The same here with giving stars like Simona. Thank you for understanding! | |
| = ps | Marius Surleac [19.Jan.09 15:26] |
| P.S. - Dora, from now on you'll be able to post texts. Please read the rules of the site and keep it that way, because you can prove something. Cheers, Marius | |
| + one yellow | dan marius [16.Jun.09 17:15] |
| loved it's minimal automatics :) it's "little arithmetics" and so on and so forth. so here's another yellow one. | |